Over the past few weeks, the Year 7/8s have been learning about poetic language features. Here is a collection of poems they created.
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Sunday, November 20, 2016
Monday, May 30, 2016
Another Short Story
Here is Josh's short story
My short story
For this piece of writing I have focussing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to: -
- use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
- use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (eg semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8
The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal
THE BUSH RIDE
As the engine roared into life Shaun started riding round. Then he saw his mate Dan going over the hill out of control. Shaun had a Honda CRF 450 and Dan had a KTM SX 450. They arrived at the start of the Mackley river track near denniston they turned on to the track the track and started riding along.
They pulled up at the first turn off the main track was one way and the track to Stockton so they turned right and that was the track. They found to the highest part and there was a turn off. They turned left thinking it was the track but it wasn't. They kept going and then there was another turn-off and they went right and the track was tight and the got lost... They stopped and decided to build a fire.
Shaun said “We are very close to water” so they checked around and they discovered a little creek so they built a fire and also they made a hut from bushes and sticks. The next morning the boys got on their bikes and rode around looking for a track after a while they found a river and they rode along the bank looking for anything. They found an old hut that had heaps of stuff in it.
They spotted some guns and they went hunting the saw a huge boar charging at them… So Shaun got the gun and shot It was that big that both of them had to carry it. They build a fire and they gutted the boar and then they cooked it.
In the morning they built a help sign and they created as much smoke as they could with the fire. Later that day a helicopter was flying around and it spotted the smoke and it landed and picked Shaun and Dan up. They got home and they were very relieved that they were home
Thursday, May 26, 2016
Short Stories
Over the past few weeks we have been focussing on Short Stories for Writing.
Here is Jake's
Koru Games
Confidence
In 2015 there was a team of confident outstanding footballers In the Koru Games tournament. We were very excited to be apart of the koru games football A team the boys and myself trained hard and played hard for this moment. The time came to get on the bus and play are first match of football we were extremely hyped up. It took about 30/45 minutes to get there but it was all worth It. The boys and I were working out strategies for the football matches. But I’m not here to talk about 2015 I’m here to talk about 2016’s koru games football A team. Now I won’t bore you by telling you who Is In the team but I will say It’s going to be one hell of a ride. This year we are stronger faster and we are going to demolish all the teams standing In are way because this year Is are year are moment are time.
Work
This year Mr muller and myself and all the boys are committed to coming top 3 In the koru games tournament. I know my boys will work and work and work to be In the top 3 place for the 2016 koru games A football team I have no doubts that we have the potential to come top 3 or even win koru games for 2016. Last year In 2015 football A team we worked very hard but we missed out and came 6th but all the boys would have learnt from that and we Will beat that placing.
Attitude
This year the boys and myself are goal focused on having a great attitude some of these things are said from some of the A team boys on how important It Is to have a good attitude.JackM said
“It Is very Important to have a good attitude because If you don’t It kind of effects your team mates In a negative way”JackH said “I think it Is Important to have a good attitude but It really depends on how your feeling and If your teammates know that you don’t feel 100% about the game that were playing”Jake said “This Is going to be a good year”
Here is Jake's
Koru Games
Confidence
In 2015 there was a team of confident outstanding footballers In the Koru Games tournament. We were very excited to be apart of the koru games football A team the boys and myself trained hard and played hard for this moment. The time came to get on the bus and play are first match of football we were extremely hyped up. It took about 30/45 minutes to get there but it was all worth It. The boys and I were working out strategies for the football matches. But I’m not here to talk about 2015 I’m here to talk about 2016’s koru games football A team. Now I won’t bore you by telling you who Is In the team but I will say It’s going to be one hell of a ride. This year we are stronger faster and we are going to demolish all the teams standing In are way because this year Is are year are moment are time.
Work
This year Mr muller and myself and all the boys are committed to coming top 3 In the koru games tournament. I know my boys will work and work and work to be In the top 3 place for the 2016 koru games A football team I have no doubts that we have the potential to come top 3 or even win koru games for 2016. Last year In 2015 football A team we worked very hard but we missed out and came 6th but all the boys would have learnt from that and we Will beat that placing.
Attitude
This year the boys and myself are goal focused on having a great attitude some of these things are said from some of the A team boys on how important It Is to have a good attitude.JackM said
“It Is very Important to have a good attitude because If you don’t It kind of effects your team mates In a negative way”JackH said “I think it Is Important to have a good attitude but It really depends on how your feeling and If your teammates know that you don’t feel 100% about the game that were playing”Jake said “This Is going to be a good year”
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