Arguments - Writing

Over the past couple of weeks we have been learning how to create effective arguments. Part of which we have been learning to use persuasive phrases to enhance our message and to use connectives to link our ideas. Here are a couple of snippets of writing:

From Caoihme...
This paragraph is a paragraph out of my agument  about why school camps shouldn't be banned. This writing shows the use of connectives. For example I used I believe and from my experience. 

I believe school camps are great for getting to know your class better. When you're on school camps you spend a lot of time with your classmates. Some people might say that children can spend time with each other on the weekend but on camp they have fun doing once in an lifetime opportunities with there friends. From my experience you also get put in groups with people that you might not normally talk to this is a good thing it means you make new friends.

and from Isla...

This is a paragraph from my persuasive arguement.I am learning to add persuasive phrases/words to make my writing more persuasive.

Here are some reasons why school camps are not a waste of time.Firstly you can meet new people and make new friends.Students get to know their teacher better and learn interesting things about them.Students may even learn about their good friends!Obviously you are pushed to aim higher and take risks which helps you become more confident in yourself.Clearly,school camps give you many experiences for example competitions,night games like spotlight,risky activities and your teachers holding strict room inspections.Do you want to be part of a group of people who don't want fun for their children?So let all children go on school camps!

This writing shows that I can use persuasive phrases/words.
For example clearly,obviously and do you want to be part of......